Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important.
Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.
Nowadays, children have become addicted to electronic items, and also tend to give more importance to their friends and favourite music. Although many argue that these parameters have potential effects on a child's growth, I strongly believe that family plays a vital role in building a child's character. This essay will shed light on both these views.
On one hand, some factors such as television, friends, and music are believed to be have more influence on children. For instance, news reports shown on television keep children updated with latest information around the world. Besides, children also obtain inspiration by watching talent shows on TV. Apart from television, children spend plenty of time with their friends and like listening to music. Friendship teaches them how to be supportive and now maintain trust. Moreover, another benefit music is that it keeps children calm and focused on their studies.
On the other hand, the formation of a child's personality is mostly based on the family, in which he has grown up . The basis values such as respect, discipline and right behaviour can only be taught by responsible parents. Moreover, a child learns family traditions and religious rituals by observing their elders. For example, during my childhood, I had always followed the footsteps of my parents and grand parents in numerous ways such as white putting on particular clothes according to occasions as well as respectfully treating my guests. Despite the fact that factors external to family have an impact on a child's development, family has the most significant potential to turn a child into a well-behaved adult.
To recapitulate, this essay illustrated that television, friends and music are some of the key factors in the process of a child's development; however, family is the most prominent one among these factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
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Suggestion: .
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, moreover, so, well, apart from, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23905723906 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78912964528 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609427609428 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5488984069 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.733333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220349248197 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699812412989 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729362784102 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134001926928 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227831042264 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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