Some people think that the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The important role of schools in each person's life is almost undeniable. A great number of people argue that the major aim of schools is to educate offspring to become model staffs and inhabitants for the society rather than to bring them benefits as individuals. I personally disagree with such view, as I believe that schools give people equal chance to develop for their own sake as well as for the society.
On the one hand, schools do benefit human individually. Children do not only learn new concepts or study academic subjects, which provide them with knowledge and broaden their mind for their own mentally progress, but also meet new peers, who may become their best friends in the future, which encourage development of their emotional life. Besides, physical education and extracurricular activities at schools also boost teenagers' stamina and physical health. All of that devote to prepare for the later phase of children's life, when they have to stand on their own feet to work and feed themselves.
On the other hand, after improving each person, schools also tend toward the society. A healthy society must be made of healthy individuals. Nobody can live alone; all citizens can lead their own life but they have to place it in the society context, since they can not survive without other human beings. After nurturing themselves with schools' support, they should use that to contribute to the society by becoming exemplary citizens as well as diligent employees. Schools have to make sure that they provide essential knowledge needed for human development because of the fees they received from each students; however, they are basically public asset, so they also have the duty of improving the society as a whole.
In conclusion, I believe that schools target at benefiting the whole society, however, I think that they offer equal advantages individually.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
The important role of schools in each persons life is almost undeniable. A great numb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, well, as for, i think, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10355987055 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61728477948 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563106796117 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5822531938 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.307692308 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14174540028 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596981048825 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450587097619 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970005194823 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387202886614 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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