Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To some extent do you agree or disagree.
The role of schools in the world today is the most modern educational discussion, with some claiming that the primary purpose of schooling is to equip students with skills necessary to participate in social life. However, I do not accept this. Instead, I believe that schools should be places where children can experience personal growth.
The purpose of school is less about preparing individuals as members of society and more about preparing individuals to live independently. This is because being a productive member of society simply does not rely on the skills and knowledge are provided with schools, including how to use the multiplication table in daily life or how to a cell works in our body. Rather, it is directly connected with one's character and individuality. In other words, for example, if a student who does not adopt moral and ethical values, but equips with professional skills required for a job, say telecommunication engineering, may go stray and use their expertise in spying and suppressing innocent political opponents fighting against the suppressive regime which is occurred in 2009 in Iran during the demonstration for the presidential election called the 'Green movement'. Furthermore, for making a living, students will inevitably learn and develop career skills as they grow up, but what they may miss in their childhoods is to learn how to be able to live independently, understand right and wrong behavior, have satisfied communication skills, taking a great deal of time and effort to master.
I do appreciate that some people think differently, saying that the curricular and extracurricular offerings in schools should align with a country's social and economic needs. While it is correct that this is essential for schoolchildren's future to be thought at schools, I feel that taking things related to job preparation in early school years is the potentially unwise viewpoint.
To conclude, I believe that the primary objective of schooling and education should be tied to developing children's personality and self-improvement, and then courses and education related to this purpose should be incorporated in the school curriculum.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Line 13, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... incorporated in the school curriculum.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, i feel, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37609329446 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18524027273 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594752186589 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.839710789 49.4020404114 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 167.636363636 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1818181818 20.7667163134 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118219578371 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529478737463 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495283778425 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906229499668 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458784359163 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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