Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In this era where people still need other people instead of the sophisticated technology, there are two different opinions about the way people behave to others. Some say that it should be the teacher who ought to teach pupils to be good persons in community while some others opine that the parents themselves who should guide their kids to do so.
In my own perspective, I do believe that school is the only place for students to be able to interact each other. It is the place where they start learning how to behave as the good members of school community which can be called as the smaller unit of society. Therefore, it is a must for the educators to make them aware more on their attitude to others. It is also argued that a teacher has more power to make them follow the rules. It means that it is not a very hard task to force them to be good and kind one to anothers. There must be reward and punishment for this. If they obey, they will have appraisals, however, when they break it, it will be possible for punishing them.
On the other hand, I also notice that the parents’ taught can be very effective for making them better in their relationship in their environment. Parents can just give examples of being a nice persons when having communication with surrounding. They should make their kids understand that as human we cannot live without our neighbor. It would create a belief that there is a need for anyone that we are the ones who are really in need. By doing this, there won’t be any crash in communal society. Unitentionally, the youth will see that peace is the most wanted of all.
It could be concluded that there are some positive points of the both opinions above. Moreover, the best result can be gained when parents and teachers could cooperate together to make things great.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'person'?
Suggestion: person
... can just give examples of being a nice persons when having communication with surround...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57186544343 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48113080323 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54128440367 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7717678786 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9411764706 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278284820019 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815922046156 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065630688972 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162003263962 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537737993971 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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