Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Others think that it is causing the opposite effect.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
he life style has undergone enormous change since the advent of modern technology. Some people believe the development of advanced technology will increase the gap between the rich and the poor, while others advocate the opposite opinion. I believe there are no relationship between technology and this gap, but the new electric devices can make people look the same and let them all enjoy convenient and comfortable life.
Firstly, the differences between the rich and the poor are impossible to fade through technology influence. Although with technology every human can enjoy immediate news from cheap smart phone, or watching movie from website. But people who earn more money can get better enjoyment than the poor. For example, both poor and rich can learn various kinds of classes with distant learning. However, after classes, rich students can pay for expensive afterschool classes to get more knowledge, while poor students can only learn by themselves. Moreover, the advanced technology only influence people’s life style and life quality. For example, rich people always enjoy new technological devices when they just come out, but for some poor, it is unaffordable.
I tend to believe that technologies have change human’s life and raise up the living quality. Both the rich and the poor can do less housework so that the time can be used in work or other aspect. Money is still hard to earn and the technologies advanced have no influence in people’s salary. So the gap between rich and poor are still there.
Overall, technology itself is not related toward the gap but it do let every people’s life become comfortable and enjoyable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23703703704 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75154028444 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548148148148 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7055221325 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268551320309 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1065357839 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086582615115 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177601299341 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540987000764 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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