Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that the question of whether to reward students with excellent academic results or those showing great improvements remains a source of controversy in the education field. While a number of people believe that only students achieving the highest grades deserve rewards, I would argue that praising students who achieve improvements is much more reasonable.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why awards should be given to students having excellent academic performances. Firstly, this could creat a highly competitive studying environment a school, seeing that students often desire to win prizes. As a consequence, school children could be encouraged to put their effort into studying for the highest scores. Secondly, by adopting this approach, gifted students who are outstanding could be given opportunities to nurture their abilities. My secondary school, for instance, selects students with the best results for extra classes to develop their capabilities in order to take them to national competitions.
On the other hand, I believe that giving encouragement to those who make strides in their studies results in more favourable outcomes. The first benifit is that this could give equal chances for every student to receive awards, rather than only focus on the highest achievers. Instead of feeling disappointed when competing with their top classmates, students who are recognized for their effort during semesters will feel motivated if they are rewarded for making significant progress. Another benifit is that this form of recognition follows the holistics principle of learning, which is to access the world of knowledge, not just to gain high scores. Consequently, several phenomena which occur when examinations approach, including pressure, axienty and cheating, would be reduced.
In conclusion, although rewarding students with highest scores is advantagous to some extent, it seems to me that ir is better to give encouragement to those who have improved their level of academic performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: with the highest
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52076677316 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9360831157 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603833865815 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2934034336 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.923076923 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271262438563 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932607178161 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628278369521 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178389822483 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051963583209 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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