Some people think that schools should reward students who have the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show progress. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about whether schools should award students who gain the excellent academic achievements or students who have significant improvements. While some people suppose that only students who achieve the best scores deserve rewards, I believe that it is more reasonable to praise students have advances in learning.
On the one hand, prizes should be given to the highest achievers for various reasons. First, this create a highly competitive studying environment in schools because they often desire to win prizes. Therefore, they are encouraged to put their effort into studying to gain the highest mark. Second, by adopting this approach, gifted students have many more oppotunities to nurture their abilities. For instance, in my secondary school, students who have the highest academic results are selected for studying in extra classes which help them to develop abilities to participate in the national competitions.
On the other hand, I believe that giving encouragement to students who make strides in learning leads to many favourable outcomes. To begin with, students is given equal chances to be awarded, rather than only focus on those who have the best achievements. This means that instead of feeling disappointed when they have to compete with the best students in class, students are recognized for having efforts in semesters will feel motivated if they are rewarded for marking significant progress. In addition, this form of recognezation follows the holistic principle of learning, which is to approach the knowledge world, not just gain the high marks. Consequently, a few phenomena take place when competitions come close such as pressure, stress and cheating would be decreased.
In conclusion, although rewarding the highest achievers is advantageous to some extent, I believe that it would be better to award students having advances in learning.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48299319728 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86799848957 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58843537415 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3440890915 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6153846154 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357607149863 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12405220954 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110142757795 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233661773108 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111613038972 0.056905535591 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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