Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.
Educating f the children is extremely important, because the future of the society relies on the young generations. many people describe the competition as true engine of the wellbeing, others disagree with this view, pointing out that cooperation is more useful skill. although I recognize some advantages in the first position, I agree with the latter opinion.
Our social system is deeply pervaded by the value of the meritocracy: since the primary school the children are taught to compete each other and such a tendency is someway positive, in fact, the confrontation is a great stimulus to enhance the students' performances, for instance, if the results in a test are rewarded with a special mention, the participants will be pulled to the best in order to obtain the prize. The supporters of this teaching model argue that rivalry between students ends up in a beneficial selection of the most talented ones, who they have the right to achieve their goals within a high-level environment freed by the presence of the less talented younglings; strictly connected with those approaches is the idea to form specific grades for distinguished children.
The opposite view, on the contrary, underline importance of the collaboration and inclusion describing those aspects as crucial in the education of the youngest citizens. it must be recognized how the best achievements in all fields can be reached only by the team work and very seldom by a single person. For example, the overall majority of the most disrupting inventions and innovations, like personal computers and Internet, were born thanks to the hard work of different professionists that were been able to cooperate each other. learning to listen the others instead simply compete with them is also important in the development of more peaceful countries not characterized by dangerous forms of nationalism. Ultimately, the collaboration it is a great tool to reduce the stress in the schools and on the workplaces: a lot of studies show how many kinds of mental illnesses are caused by an excessive sense of competition among people constantly under pressure.
To summarize, I believe that the children should learn to collaborate, because there are a lot of advantages in the long term, both for the individuals and the society, although I recognize some pros in the competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20472440945 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03283537242 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590551181102 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.9967110259 49.4020404114 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.272727273 106.682146367 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6363636364 20.7667163134 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210600260273 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690238213313 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452100587635 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123944090579 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297633401508 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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