Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.
As compared to the last decades, the level of competition among children's is highly increased to become better and successful at an early stage of life. For this, some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged while others argued that teaching them to coöperate with others than competing makes them more useful adults. I totally agree with the second statement, but it may hold some more advice which I discuss above.
In one hand, Parents who push their children's to involve in the competitions and develop the feeling of achieving best have some motivations and goals in their minds. They start overburdening their children by putting their expectations. As a result, children's are moving towards the frustration, depression and get anxious over small things. Additionally, they feel like they are not good enough for doing anything which affects their confidence, turns to a mental breakdown.
On the other hand, the teachers and parents who focus on evolving the children's through different group activities, where they learn how to coöperate and work as teammates to meet anything. To illustrate, they have a better understanding of each other, provides easy communication and fewer fightings among students in the schools. Moreover, the manners of sharing and involving others into their happiness also adopted by the children effortlessly. When they grow as an adult, it seems quite easier for them to adjust and adapt the changes quickly which consistently useful for experiencing a diverse range of unique possibilities. Furthermore, if they want to join another country for education, it's really beneficial for them to coöperate with different national and international students without competing with them.
In conclusion, I believe that parents and teachers should encourage children's to acquire the feeling of humbleness and coöperation with their peers. Basically, it forms a peace and gives freedom to do everything at your best rather forcing themselves to do just for winning and getting rewards.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38080495356 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93524250672 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606811145511 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0416891447 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.142857143 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244373011774 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816210776122 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816954147618 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155251428772 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1005885853 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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