Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are so many opinions here. I think we should decided it with every area. In some cases we should these children should be competition. In some other cases these children should learn how to co-operate. There are some reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, some area are poverty, we should teach them a sense of competition. If they want to become a strong man, they should overtake other classmates and to fight for more chances. These children should be know if they do not want fight for chance, they will lose chance. Because their money is less than wealthy peers, these rich classmates have better education and learn more knowledge. Even if these wealthy peers can go to better private school. The poorer children can only go to public school. If they want get more chance, they need to learn harder than other students. Attention, the Harvard University has very expensive tuition, if poor student want to get better chance like this, they should be more powerful than other students, they might get scholarship go to this university. This is an example, In fact, there are many other things that should be achieved beyond their peers.
Secondly, for wealthy children, they should be taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Usually these children have a way out, and they have a chance to try again in many things. If they cooperate, they will get more opportunities to achieve greater goals, such as being the boss of a company. Do more creative things by cooperate with others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, i think, in fact, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86641221374 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39639039106 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530534351145 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.664579485 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.8333333333 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5555555556 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290605743381 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10513927867 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871740452991 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224972139594 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396777249273 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 9.78957915832 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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