Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Making a strict law to control the amount of noise which a person make allows people to avoid the disturbance. This has many disadvantages , but its benefits still overshadow its drawbacks.
The opinion of a strict law for noise has many advantages, including health and behavior. Indeed, some people have a elderly person in their families. This can result in a quiet area for them to keep their health . If their neighborhood turn on loud music, it could be effect too much in these people. In some case, these older people can have a heart attacking when they hear loud noise as music or something like that in neighboring places. Besides, in order to concentrate work or study, a person need an atmosphere which do not have any sound. Meanwhile, other have loud sounds as music or sing Karaoke. As a result, an argument is happened by them even they could fight together. It can seen that noise can affect to someone mood, thereby changing their behavior. Therefore, people really want a law to avoid that situation.
On the other hand, many drawbacks of a strict law to control the amount of noise can be listed as the right to make noise and technology. Firstly, people need to do anything that they like although it might make a noise, especially parties. That is lead to a relaxing for them after a long working day. After that, they would have full energy for next performance in a company. Secondly, thanks to technology, people can make some devices which help them to avoid disturb others. For example, there are some wireless headphones with noise cancelling, stopping noise when people wear it. Therefore, a strict law may not necessary.
All in all, despite some drawbacks on strict laws to control the amount of noise, the positive sides of it are still more desirable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79032258065 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54423189979 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532258064516 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.219983468 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.25 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278817359262 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858585920402 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755913759808 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180381707477 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044356698488 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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