Some people think that women should be able to join the army, navy or air forces like what men do. Others think that only men should do thatTo what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think that women should be able to join the army, navy or air forces like what men do. Others think that only men should do that

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

people argue in terms of women participation in military services. many people consider that females should be forbidden to join as a soldier, while, others believe that female had free rein to enlist in any kind of military services. I partially agree with the statements with the reason I outline below.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why the female is a good candidate to serve in active duty in the army. First of all, not all women have a poor physical ability since many of them participate in vigorous physical training, making them a suitable candidate for the soldier. secondly, it is proven that women have an excellent skill in several areas in army duties such as managing logistic distributions and financial skill. this brings out benefits to the army institutions as they have additional competent soldiers possessing a wide range of skills.

On the other hand, various considerations ought to be taken into account regarding female serve in military services. Firstly, at a certain period of life, women require maternity leave. this will be a drawback for the nations if they have a large number of female enlisting as a soldier because this leave will significantly cut the number of army troop. secondly, many females soldier experience sexual assault either by their fellow male counterparts or their commanders. Research in female army force of USA found that 4 of 10 female soldiers experienced sexual harassment during their service in the military. Consequently, this leads to several health issues such as post-traumatic disorder and depression, and result in the early leave of female as active-duty soldiers.

In conclusion, although there are a few issues should be considered regarding women taking part in military services, I acknowledge that female soldier can bring many benefits to the army institution.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86840257519 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3254616482 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.857142857 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0776292855927 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304375827244 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298163904977 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.060779062604 0.151304729494 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359217967412 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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