Probably the largest employer of a country, the government is famous for its huge number of staff. But as to whether young people should be appointed to critical government positions, the debate never seems to end. From my perspective, age is an important factor to be considered in terms of selecting talents for influential positions in the government.
Admittedly, having younger employees serving at important government positions may bring creativity and innovation to the work. Active in exposing themselves to a wider range of sources of information, younger superiors can come up with creative solutions to problems including improving the degree of public satisfaction or bridging the gap of communication between governments and people they serve. Besides, young people who are not as conservative as their older colleagues and sometimes bold leaders may help to achieve higher goals when they are at top positions of the government.
However, due to their lack of required qualities to be a director or even the prime minister, younger employees actually are not the best candidates for those vital positions of the government. For example, the minister is expected to be able to have the knowledge and experience of predicating and battling financial crisis to run the Department of Finance safely and successfully. Nevertheless, those in their twenties can hardly have equipped themselves with such competences. This is the reason why few people under 40 are elected to be leaders of critical sectors.
In my opinion, a minimum age requirement have to be established because younger individuals are not calm enough on account of their age and thus can hardly make sufficient contributions. The young and aggressive employees will be relatively more easily irritated and remain sober-minded in comparison to their older counterparts, who are used to tackling affairs with normal attitudes because of their rich social experience.
To sum up, younger people are not quite competent for the leading positions. Despite the vigor brought by them, calmness and sufficient experience have to be the priority that citizens expect to see from the governmental officers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...amous for its huge number of staff. But as to whether young people should be appointed to cri...
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Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecause of their rich social experience. To sum up, younger people are not quite ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, however, may, nevertheless, so, thus, as to, for example, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41055718475 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08192587983 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577712609971 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7978872847 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.785714286 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200231522878 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759847895388 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644803508235 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118937186476 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601659643783 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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