Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The influence of movies and televisions, as one of the most complicated as well as the most sensitive topics in the modern society, does and will always arouse the attention from the public, which leads to the argument whether they generates more benefits or drawback to the behavior of young people. To be honest, the benefits of them far outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin with, voices can be heard that watching inspirational movies enables youngsters to develop some precious personalities. That is to say, when the content of movies involves the importance of love, friendship, integrity or emphasizing other proper conducts, young audience are prone to imitate the behaviors of the main figures, which makes it possible for them to develop good behavioral patterns and form proper values. For instance, in the film Spiderman which is highly favored by youngsters , the protagonist has been successfully characterized as a courageous young man always willing to help normal people and his famous saying “with great power comes greater responsibility” still encourage the fans of Spiderman to offer help to those in need. Similarly, in the film Brave Heart which was nominated for ten Academy Awards at the 68th Oscar, the protagonist has been successfully characterized as a courageous man eager for freedom, who are still regarded by many youngsters as their idol currently, encouraging them to pursue what they want.） Hence, under no circumstance should the influence of films on the young be overlooked.
Additionally, it should be acknowledged that television functions as a guide of youngsters to take responsibility for their behaviors. To be more specific, watching television enables the young to learn what should not be done more vividly and effectively due to the fact that audio-visual information can better attract peoples’ attention and engage their interest. Such is the case for programs aimed at law education, which creates the clearest deterrent effect by presenting juveniles with the harsh punishment after offending. Consequently, young people are prone to gradually realize how to behave in a socially accepted way by seeing such contents.
Notwithstanding, opponents constantly claim that the conduct of young people will be negatively affected, because admittedly, too much screen time may interfere with children’s study and other activities which are beneficial to development. For example, children may get distracted from homework or become unwilling to play outside with the peers. Nonetheless, it still doesn't function as an persuasive support because supervision from parents and restriction on watching time will extensively reduce the adverse influence.
To summarize, when all the factors have been taken into consideration, watching films or television is fairly beneficial to better the behaviors of the young. Although measures should be taken to avoid the side effects, watching proper content will for sure bring fruitful reward in the days to come.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: generate
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'man'.
Suggestion: always man
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, look, may, nonetheless, similarly, so, still, well, for example, for instance, as well as, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50322580645 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13636795619 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567741935484 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.450250886 48.9658058833 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.6 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13547059131 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465028614807 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342626092066 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074094626312 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404275609772 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 11.7677419355 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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