The government should spend money in promoting sport and art in school, rather than sponsoring professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sports and arts are always the cynosure of all eyes, especially for countries whose citizens have already enjoyed a high living standard and thus show more desire for a colorful life. In that regard, the government is wondering whether investing in sports and arts in school functions as a better option compared with supporting professional activities of the same field in communities. From my perspective, funding should be provided to school instead of communities.
Firstly, money allocated to school is of greater educational value. Financial support to the communities leads to diverse professional sports and art events, such as art exhibitions and sports competition. These activities add colors to life, but are more for entertainment instead of serving an education purpose. In contrast, funds in school allow students to have more related courses, better facilities, and more experienced art teachers as well as coaches, which can kindle students’ interest for sports and arts, making them more willing to learn.
Secondly, sponsoring school-related sports and arts is beneficial to the cultivation of sports and art abilities. Professional events, to be honest, are not for every person to be involved in, since they have a certain requirement for art appreciation and need participant to be highly skilled in sports. In other words, the entry barrier for these activities are high. However, more funding to schools allows them to afford offering courses to students of different level. There can be basic courses for beginners and advanced ones for specialized students. As a result, instructions vary from student to student, making it more likely for students to achieve significant progress in sports and arts.
In conclusion, schools instead of communities deserve the financial support, since this practice is of greater educational value and enables students to achieve greater progress in related fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4966442953 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97750677531 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557046979866 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8553292111 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236617147561 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961458265058 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105727391367 0.0667982634062 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149981036462 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652157943279 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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