Some people think that young people should spend more of their free time at home with their families and spend less time entertaining themselves outside, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people believe that youngsters should allocate much of their leisure time to their families, while others contend that they should enjoy themselves outside. In my opinion, spending time with family is far more important than being outside. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and support it with valid arguments and examples.
Those who believe that time with the family at home is more significant have their justifications. The main reason for this argument is that young people can learn moral and ethical values in a safe way when they spend time with family because a family is the place where children imbibe these values in order to conduct themselves well in the world. Moreover, this time can be used to strengthen the bond with their family. In contrast, if they do not spend quality time with their loved ones, the ties between the family will not be strong enough. Studies have shown that children who spend more time with their family have better manners and are more conscientious than their counterparts. Thus, family time is of utmost importance for young ones.
On the other hand, some people opine that having an escape route to the outer world is significantly vital. This is because it is a great opportunity to break the monotony of daily life. This fills the millennials with new energy; therefore, they can be productive at school later. In addition, it is an excellent way to learn interpersonal skills in order to make new connections at work and be successful. In contrast, people who did not interact much outside of their family while growing up could turn out to be introverts and fail miserably at making real connections at their workplace.
In conclusion, although going out to enjoy themselves helps make new connections, the values that parents can teach in a family setting are invaluable. I believe that young people should not only devote their spare time to family but also manage to take some time from their busy schedule for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ople can learn moral and ethical values in a safe way when they spend time with family becaus...
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...real connections at their workplace. In conclusion, although going out to enjoy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92058823529 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56017374789 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4966692911 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5625 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451875040505 0.244688304435 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152700371034 0.084324248473 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952934854816 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287676412567 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890926813677 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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