Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
It is argued that keeping animals in captivity is unacceptable and immoral so it is imperative to shut down all these places while others say that zoos can play an integral part in wildlife protection. In spite of some severe consequences zoos can bring to animals, I believe that they are prime factors for their conservation.
On the one hand, keeping animals locked up in cages for their entire life can deprive them of freedom. In fact, there is an inseparable correlation between animals and natural habitats so caging them can deter them from being exposed to the wild, which can lead to losing essential surviving aptitude. Therefore many of them might suffer from boredom and confinement. Furthermore, it is recorded that there is a myriad of zoos mistreating animals. For example, these animals are often provided with insufficient food and medical care and they are woefully abused to entertain and appeal more visitors to the zoos. More specifically, when they are old or sick, they are instantly taken to slaughterhouses where they are killed for their meat, fur and other valuable parts of their bodies.
On the other hand, many people feel that zoos are useful in some regards. First of all, the illegal poaching and trade are happening more often so zoos can help to preserve endangered species by keeping them safe from hunters and other threats such as habitat destruction or the fast speed of urbanization. Especially, some large-funded zoos run breeding programs to impede them from becoming extinct. Secondly, zoos can impart the most practical knowledge about the unshaken importance of animals to people so their awareness of conserving the nature and endangered species are highly intensified. Evidently, hundreds of non-profit organizations and projects established to combat against the extinction of some animals shed a light on the excessive concern of people about this issue. Consequently, factors intimidating the survival of wild animals can be gradually eliminated.
In conclusion, although zoos-related issues are severe, its role in protection of wild animals should also be taken into thorough consideration by virtue of their advantages they can bring to animals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...to losing essential surviving aptitude. Therefore many of them might suffer from boredom ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26988636364 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89811578278 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576704545455 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1867939114 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267869792584 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962732471633 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627783149972 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177690758296 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495258773704 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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