Some people who have been in prison become a good citizens later, and it is often that these are the best people to talk to teenager about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is an undeniable fact that some people who have been good members of society from crime. It is undeniable that using these to teach young generations is the best solution. Personally, I support this idea for some main reasons as follows.
As far as the first reason is concerned, to persuade teenagers, the opposite presentational people should own the convincing stories from their experiences took from endurances of strict punishments in real condition in prison such as beaten by roommates who are old offences, serving out a sentence, death penalty. This leads to the fact that their speech is real and highly persuasive characteristics. As a result, the young people get negative training outcomes from presentations due to the fact that they are attracted by teller’s stories. By way of illustration, there can be afraid by the danger fields when the youth generation hear extremely punishable times from the tellers. For example, beaten by rattan whips, working under the hot condition environments, will being served the capital punishment.
As far as the second factor is concerned, with the people have ever broken the law and served the serious punishments, they often are got a hold defects in their body such as big scars in face, lack of arm or leg, the sick and poor body, which is caused by the rehabilitate process in the prison. This makes youth people listening to the presentations are threatened and persuaded. In addition, One more factor is concerned, the behaviors and serious words of the people rehabilitated for a long time are strict and extremely dangerous.
In conclusion, it is my belief that selecting people who have spent a part of their life in prison to teach teenagers is the best choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01038062284 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90621187392 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574394463668 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.7515630425 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.666666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213928117759 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781778941512 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775651977732 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150972911652 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645777282236 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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