Some people who have been in prison become a good citizens later, and it is often that these are the best people to talk to teenager about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is an undeniable fact that some people who have been good members of society from crime. It is undeniable that using these to teach young generations is the best solution. I am still totally in favour of this issue.
As far as the first reason is concerned, to persuade teenagers, the opposite presentational people should have the convincing stories which they have ever spent in the real life in prison, especially, which strict punishments such as beaten by the old offences in prison, serving out a sentence, death penalty. This leads to the fact that their stories have real and highly persuasive characteristics. As a result, the young people get negative training results from presentations due to the fact that they are attracted by teller’s stories. By way of illustration, they can be afraid by the danger fields as they hear the tellers reveal about their strict punishments. Such as beaten by rattan whips, working under the hot condition environments, will being served the capital punishment.
As far as the second factor is concerned, with the people have ever broken the law and served the serious punishments, they often have the serious scars in their body such as big scars in face, lack of arm or leg, the sick and poor body, which is caused by the process rehabilitate in the prison. This makes young people listening to the presentations are threatened and persuaded. In addition, One more factor is concerned, the behaviors and serious words of the people rehabilitated for a long time are strict and extremely dangerous.
In conclusion, I still hold a belief that selecting people who have finished their life in prison to teach teenagers is the best choice.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96126760563 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83695983457 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542253521127 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9350999239 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.416666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231134337862 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832880190274 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769512230288 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159722262282 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508353003907 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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