Some people who have been in prison become a good citizens later, and it is often that these are the best people to talk to teenager about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is an undeniable fact that some people who have been a good members in in social from crime. In is undeniable that using these to teach young generations is the best solution. I am still totally to favour of this issue.
As far as the first reason is concerned, to persuade teenagers, the opposite presentational people should have the convincing stories which they have ever spent in the real life in prison. Especially, which strict punishments such as beaten by the old offences in prison, serving out a sentence, death penalty. This leads to the fact that their stories is real and high persuaded characteristics. As a result, the young people get the negative training results from presentations because they are attracted by teller’s stories. By way of illustration, they can be afraid by the danger fillings when they hear the tellers said about the strict punishments. Such as beaten by rattan whips, working under the hot condition environments, will being served the capital punishment.
As far as the second factor is concerned, with the people have break the law and serve the serious punishments, they often have the big scars in their body such as taking scars in face, losing the arm or leg, having the sick body, which is caused by the process rehabilitate in the prison. This makes young people who are listening in the presentations is scared and persuaded. One more factor is concerned is that the behaviors and serious words of the people who have been rehabilitated after a long time are strict and extreme dangerously.
In conclusion, I am still to hold a belief that selecting people who have ever been finish their life from prison to teach teenager are the best choice.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is an undeniable fact that some people who have been a good members...
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...ome people who have been a good members in in social from crime. In is undeniable tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8724137931 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78581637755 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541379310345 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0964510994 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.692307692 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259094933857 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879772732993 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795575256118 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175172526189 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490532597767 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is an undeniable fact that some people who have been a good members...
^^
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...ome people who have been a good members in in social from crime. In is undeniable tha...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8724137931 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78581637755 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541379310345 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0964510994 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.692307692 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259094933857 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879772732993 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795575256118 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175172526189 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490532597767 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.