Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The retirement age has become a controversial problem because some people believe that with the longer lifespan of recent times, retirement should consequently be delayed. In my opinion, no change should be made to the existing system.
Firstly, even if humans can now aim for a better life expectancy, the effect of time on workers still has its impact.
This means that whether employees live longer or not, after a certain age (usually after 60) they tend to be physically and mentally tired and, therefore, less efficient.
Moreover, those who regardless of their advanced age are employed at workplaces where new technologies and method are easily introduced, may not be able to keep up with more receptive and active new generations.
Secondly, after having contributed to one's company for decades, everyone should be allowed to spend his\her old age as they want to without being obliged to work longer only because average age has raised.
More noticeable is that as a consequence of postponed retirement, younger people are deprived of the possibility of having their own professional development.
With two generations blocked in their unsatisfactory positions, the economy can nothing but go down.
In the end, it is preferable that everything stays unchanged.
There are no benefits to having older and older people being paid for a job they do not want do anymore rather than fresh people who are eager to take their place.
Most of all, I think the ultimate goal of improved life and, hence, longer existence is to give people the chance to experience as much as they can of the world, not to confine them to their workplace.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 248.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81451612903 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.84828704951 2.80592935109 137% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.693548387097 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.495126783 49.4020404114 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.2 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252736948822 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849735511491 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800073589741 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828536025067 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771790505291 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.71 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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