Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
Write at least 250 words.
It is proposed that the lower limit for retiring age should be significantly raised in response to to higher life expectancy of a growing number of senior citizens. Personally, I find it hard to support such proposition.
On the one hand, there is ground to the belief that an adjustment of age for retirement is of absolute necessity. Firstly, as unemployed old people rely on monthly pension to pay for their expenses, the fact that they can live longer often translates into more pressure on the taxpayers, whose money is partially extracted to ensure the lives of the elderly. Secondly, there are many fully capable workers who can still work for their livelihood so it is unfair to take away their desires to work and contribute. Some might say that the combination of these two reasons can cause social tension between generations and this problem can be solved by simply raising retirement age.
On the other hand, I see flaws in these arguments that make the proposition less credible. To begin with, in order for a society to develop both economically and politically, youngsters should be facilitated with new avenues to become the leaders. If the older generations are still in office, such promotion is unlikely to take place and consequentially, hindering the social growth. In comparison to this, some financial pressure is a low price to pay. In addition, a fixed retirement age is necessary because there is more to life than just working. Old people should direct their attention at other focuses such as entertainment or their own well-beings. In this modern world where people tend to be workaholic, a definite threshold for retirement can be the remedy that many people need.
In conclusion, while there exist understandable reasons for raise age for retirement, I think such a change is more harmful than beneficial.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21130952381 0.247107183377 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.154761904762 0.155533422707 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113095238095 0.0946595960268 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0505952380952 0.0501214627716 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0357142857143 0.0437548338989 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133928571429 0.122226691241 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0297619047619 0.0403226058552 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91883489829 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.047619047619 0.0326793684256 146% => OK
Particles: 0.00297619047619 0.00163938923432 182% => OK
Determiners: 0.0863095238095 0.0861772015684 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0267857142857 0.021408717616 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0119047619048 0.011925033212 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1849.0 1933.35771543 96% => OK
No of words: 306.0 316.048096192 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04248366013 6.12580529183 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339869281046 0.374742101984 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258169934641 0.28420135186 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18954248366 0.203846283523 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.150326797386 0.137316102897 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91883489829 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.037074148 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591503267974 0.56093040696 105% => OK
Word variations: 65.2083744444 60.7387585426 107% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8571428571 20.7743622355 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1479431076 49.517814964 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.071428571 127.492653851 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.7743622355 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.14285714286 0.814263465372 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 47.6741363212 49.1944974215 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.55555555556 1.69124875643 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238266133047 0.332605444948 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0874146059898 0.102741220458 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0581030362479 0.0668466124924 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.53640463652 0.534860350844 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192530720128 0.148594505496 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961046754864 0.134430193775 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398541129555 0.0742795772207 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.302063327139 0.324371583561 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.109559880619 0.0638462369009 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146787721921 0.228012699653 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564136406721 0.058150111329 97% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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