The issue of how people become rich and what they can do with their wealth is the one that needs to be looked at carefully. These days, there has been a growing body of opinion that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the chance to help others. Many people hold the opinion that the rich can do everything they want with their money. However, I completely agree with the opinion that wealthy individuals can help others with their money, and in this essay, I will present the reasons for my view, which are that rich people can fund education to enable poor students to go to school and invest in healthcare to help the poor access medical services at a low cost.
To begin with, one of the most compelling reasons for holding my view is that wealthy people can allocate budgets to sponsor poor children, so those children can go to school. This means that it could enable more children who are financially difficult to get access to education. As a result, this would increase the number of well-educated people, which would create greater source of capable workforce for society. In addition, this workforce can become employees and contribute to the development of many companies, which brings more economic advantages to the country in the long run. In short, it helps to demonstrate that the rich can use financial advantage to fund education and create a source of potential employees for the economy.
Another convincing reason for my position is that individuals who are rich can invest in the health sector. An argument for investing in healthcare is that it provides an opportunity for everyone to get treatment at an affordable price. This is due to the fact that a large section of society is unable to pay for medical expenses because their incomes are merely enough to make ends meet. A good example of this is that when a friend of mine was in high school, he got sick, but he came from an economically disadvantaged region and paying a huge amount of medical costs was beyond his reach; therefore, his illness became worse. That is why if my friend is sponsored by healthcare insurance, he did not need to worry about the medical expenses. In short, when rich people can invest in healthcare, they can provide an opportunity for many poor people to get treatment at a low cost.
By way of conclusion, I believe that people who are prosperous can sponsor poor students to go to school, then create a greater source of a capable workforce for the economy and invest in the health sector to provide an opportunity for financially disadvantaged individuals to access medical treatment services at an affordable price. Therefore, it seems to me that wealthy people can help others with their capabilities and assets.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, in addition, in short, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 477.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78406708595 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64665234266 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448637316562 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4340986492 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.235294118 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0588235294 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142513218104 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579151118554 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757591188721 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0952136004743 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865886765048 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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