Some schools agree that fast food restaurants and supermarkets can promote their products in school and that school benefit from it.
Is it a positive or a negative development?
Consuming convenient food and shopping habit has been rising among students on these days. It is argued that eateries and shopping centres can sale their products insides the school campus and therefore, the educational authority can earn a ready-made of money on it. However, I believe that this movement will seriously affect students career both physically and financially.
To begin with, the school management can find the money from alternative way rather than run fa ast food outlet in school compound. In fact, students are often attracted ready made food like burger, pizza and French fries, so if it is available inside the premises pupils may purchase and consume it. As a result, the students become sick or ill and sometimes it certainly impacts on their studies too. This is because, certain food contains a myriad of fat, cholesterol and chemical substances which will ruin their physical growth significantly.
Another problem is that though it brings immense benefits to the school authority , this facility will develop a financial burden to the students family. This is due to the fact that pupil will lure many products in shops like luxuries pen, dress, toys and computer games so that the parents should be pestered by their children to buy and utilize it. Thus, the parents find some extra money to get those products from shop and eventually, this trend will affect their financial stability in the future. For instance, in India, there is no shops inside the school campus as per the government’s strict law and order in order to avoid over shopping among schoolers.
To conclude, it true that schools can generate money from restaurants and shops but this initiative will obviously make a tendency to develop unusual habits, materialistic culture and also it affects ones career as a whole.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15050167224 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64436297727 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7560701521 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.333333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278210769663 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988522301328 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772802326642 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17632902643 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128192063632 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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