In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment.
The issue of juvenile delinquency rate has always been a crucial point for the overwhelming majority of people who truly believe that adolescents should be convicted and jailed as adults. When it comes to me, I definitely feel that everyone must obey the law, but we should understand that most teenagers are still kids and prison can be a heavy trauma for them further in life.
Though there are several important points to make in support of my position, on of the core argument that I would like to make in this debate is that adolescents, probably, can be traumatized for life after serving their penalty in prison. There is no doubt that teenagers totally run the risk of getting mental diseases. For instance, in 2017 it was reported in The New York Times, that nine-tenth of teenagers who had been sentenced to prison and had been there for more that a year, got a several disorders, which could not been cured fully.
Another aspect to be mentioned is that not only will youngsters be limited in opportunities later in life, but also they will gravitate towards to do crimes again. It is obvious that such close communities as prisons keep a huge number of different types of criminals. In order to survive, teenagers have to communicate with murderers, drug dealers and so on. Having conducted a research in the field of crime psychology, scientists have revealed that 80 per cent of adolescents end up in prison again since they got a lot of acquaintances who motivate them for bad actions even after their first prison sentence.
To conclude, taking everything into account all I mean is that teenagers are not as mature as adults. Therefore, I am sure, adolescents should not be in prison for grown-ups.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...rug dealers and so on. Having conducted a research in the field of crime psychology, scien...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, therefore, for instance, i mean, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78787878788 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72101789293 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612794612795 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3627375387 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.272727273 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124665204189 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487250467395 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0225463823479 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770311024849 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182847975533 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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