Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

A number of students often opt to spend a year post school and pre- university, traveling or working. Although it's often argued that this wastes a lot of time, i believe that the advantages of this break outweighs the disadvantages.

The main disadvantage of this break is the waste of time. In other words, time that would otherwise have been spent studying, is spent on leisure or working and as a result, studying is ultimately delayed, consequently life in General. To illustrate, if a student decided to proceed to the university immediately post school, they would study and complete the university much faster and subsequently get a head start in life as opposed to one who preceded with traveling.

Despite this,The advantages outweigh the draw backs and among these are, Students get a much deserved break from study and An opportunity to work gives Students a better perspective of what they would want to major on, in the university. Firstly, A break between studies, gives students a chance to rest. Moreover, by the time they decide to continue their studies, they are refreshed thus ready to learn. For example, a saying goes, "all work and no play, makes Jack a dull boy." Secondly, an opportunity to work, provides room for one to decide what to major on in the university. In other words, it helps students decide their job preferences, Subsequently their career. For instance volunteering in our local clinic after highschool, made me decide to be a Nurse.

To sum up, Even though time is wasted taking a break between studies, it gives break and one gets to appropriately make a career choice, thus my opinion that it's advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, thus, for example, for instance, in general, as a result, in other words, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99293286219 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88857100921 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56890459364 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0476407466 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.75 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0833333333 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201497344965 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718763646822 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555607487085 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125167062599 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325471861837 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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