Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that these day students completed high school and take one or two years off before starting university. They either work or travel at this time. However, I believe that this brings some drawbacks instead of benefits for them
On the one hand, young people take a year off after finishing high school. This brings some disadvantages because of some reasons. First of all, people cannot catch up the important knowledge to prepare for a new school compared to their peers and they will not have some interesting experiences when they try to enroll in the university that they want to. Moreover, when young people take a trip or find a job, they might give up higher education. For example, the young person has already a good job and have a stable income, they do not feel the urge to enroll in the university.
On the other hand, taking a year off between a high school and university have some positives. Firstly, young people take a year off for traveling or working, they will gain real experiences for their life. Having a job is an important chance which enhances their skills such as communication skill or presentation skill. These skills will help them in the future. Secondly, traveling can open their minds such as knowing some other traditional foods or cultures, it is a great way to relax before enrolling the university. Learners can meet new friends and create some relationships with other people in different places.
To sum up, although traveling or working during a year off can bring some benefits, I believe that students should focus on their education instead of finding a job or traveling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, first of all, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81785714286 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59296290615 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539285714286 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5688558668 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3571428571 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277808727333 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1051521442 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835831793532 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185337043221 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327482958756 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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