Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on
how much they produce and sell.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
One of the responsibilities of a manager is to motivate their employees to increase their
performance. However, I strongly disagree that basing their salaries on their rates of
production and sales would be the most effective method. (37 words)
The performance in many cases cannot simply be quantified in terms of sales or
production. A teacher’s job, for example, is to teach classes, assess homework, and
provide students with feedback, none of which involves producing or selling any goods. In
this case, it is the performance of her students and their levels of satisfaction with
aspects of her performance such as rapport or punctuality that decide how successful he
has been. (72 words)
Furthermore, the performance of many workers is greatly affected by external factors
beyond their control. The state of the economy, unexpected political developments, and
extreme weather conditions can all have significant impacts on how much a worker can
sell or produce. A hurricane, for example, can easily devastate a farm and all its produce
without its workers being responsible for any of the damages or the ensuing drop in
production rates. Basing wages on sales or production rates would actually demotivate
workers in such cases. (85 words)
Some may argue that it is difficult to assess anything other than a worker’s output,
making any other form of appraisal less effective. However, managers these days have
tools such as questionnaires and Customer Relations Management platforms that allow
them to form a relatively clear picture of a worker’s overall performance. (85 words)
In conclusion, I think deciding how much an employee should earn based solely on their
sales or production figures would be both impossible and unfair in most, if not all, cases.
Instead, employers should look at a more diverse set of performance indicators, including
customer satisfaction and punctuality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44518272425 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05727636558 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594684385382 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.730914134 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.076923077 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106853267515 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036008344503 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286760903257 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0279180761589 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362134226455 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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