Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
I would like to disagree to the concept of salary level which measured based on production and sell indicator. In 1888, the ancient left thinker, Karl Marx has predicted that in the modern era, the rule of industrialization should be transform from quality to quantity production, and it is represented the nature of capitalism.
In another hand, we should acknowledge that the implementation of production and sell indicator has motivated plethora of workers to divided their more time increasing the number of production and sell. They have to minimalized their intermission and family time for gaining bigger salary then before. Sociologically, they should earn proud based on their wage achievement, albeit they do not gain true happiness. In addition, Prof. Tanaka Aishi, a Head of the Department of Psychology, University of Harvard described that 40% of workers in America were depressed due to fabrication’s pressure.
As a negative consequence of production and sell indicator, some economic expert substituted this model by performance indicator which the wage, reward and punishment achievement should assess with the holistic measurement, i.e. dicipline, cleanliness, loyalty, quality of production, as well as leadership. The main idea of performance indicator is concern to put production quality and humanity principles in the top business priority. Afterward, while performance indicator established, many industrial sectors in the world have been applicating it.
In another words, in the contemporary world the production and sell indicator were not relevant for everyone, and it do not be used as personal wealthy barometer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, then, well, while, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66666666667 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32521874837 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610441767068 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.2232535068 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.272727273 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10644654318 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379765177489 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397433572165 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603084688905 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170762943111 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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