Some wild animals are disappeared as a natural process It is believed that people have no reason to protect animals Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion

Many people believe that it is no good protecting wild animals from being extinct because it is a natural phenomenon. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this opinion because there are several other factors leading to their disappearance and people are advisal to join hands to improve this situation.

On the one hand, what drives animal species to the verge of extinction are mainly due to people’s activities and extreme weather. The first reason is overexploitation for commercial purposes. Take, for example, the rampant hunting for ivories and horns, for which a myriad of elephants and rhinos are being poached to not only purchase but also produce ornaments. Another case in point, forest which is home for such kinds of animals are destroyed to make way for the construction of industries or holiday resorts. The second reason relating to weather phenomena, such as climate change or disaster. In fact, on a yearly basis registers a significant figure of animals dying from volcanoes, wildfire or acid rain.

On the other hand, it is necessary to protect animal species due to great benefits they can bring. Firstly, animals make a contribution to people’s sustainable development by providing a large amount of food to afford every individuals in the world. If people do not exploit appropriately, they would be faced with food shortage or even starvation, which directly reduces the standard of living. Secondly, animal species also play a vitally important in recreational pursuits. Zoos, circuses, as well as holiday destinations, for instance, can attract an array of customers and tourists due to the performance of tigers, gorillas or dolphins, thereby maximining the profit.

In conclusion, I personally believe apart from natural process, the disappearance of animal species happens due to various reasons, and it is of necessity to prevent this situation.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of necessity to prevent this situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97410303939 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3378316622 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261014087098 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853557292557 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729882025529 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166806821826 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067957913054 0.056905535591 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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