Students work whiling study.
Numerous students do part-time jobs. This essay discusses the causes and gives suggestions regarding this issue.
Some students do extra work to repay student loans. Free education is not yet universally offered and tuition fees are still high in most areas, especially the amount of money required for one to go through college. Many families cannot pay the fees for their children. Hence, their children often have to turn to bank loans and begin to repay the loan the moment they enter the college, which makes doing part-time jobs necessary for them.
Young people need more money to buy things they want. We live in a world of abundant stuff and 24-hour buying opportunities, students are constantly being lured into shopping . But apparently, family support, in most cases, will not suffice to help fulfill such desires. Therefore, many students need to engage in after-school jobs to cover the additional costs.
Part-time jobs take time and energy. Student who have been worn out often fail to focus on lectures. What is worse, those young part-time workers often have not sufficient time to do reviews and previews. If this situation last for long, schools will produce a multitude of academically unqualified students. One of the most effective approach to make it unnecessary for students to work outside is granting scholarship automatically to students from poor family. And we also need to discourage the prevalence of consumerism among students. The best method to achieve this goal is to teach students to focus on self-improvement and self-insight instead of catch-up purchases.
In conclusion, students do part-time jobs mainly to repay bank loans and do extra purchases. Yong people may have some benefits from the activity, but in a long run, it is harmful. And I think giving scholarship to poor family students and purchase education are the solution to this issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
A large number of students spend a lot of time doing part...
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Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... pressure thus produced. In this essay, Ill discuss the cause of students participa...
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Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Ill) must be used with a third-person verb: 'discusses'.
Suggestion: discusses
...ssure thus produced. In this essay, Ill discuss the cause of students participation of ...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oing part-time jobs necessary for them. Young people need more money to buy thin...
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Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o devote themselves to after-school jobs to cover the extra living costs. Pa...
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Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... jobs to cover the extra living costs. Part-time jobs are time consuming and en...
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Line 7, column 602, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o achieve this goal is to teach students to focus on self-improvement and self-in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, i think, in conclusion, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19197707736 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8160140081 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550143266476 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1450206875 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3636363636 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8636363636 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154237416397 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531278142341 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738214151523 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931497831041 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250694766487 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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