These days, the way many folks communicate with each other has altered owing to the technology. Technology has influenced the types of relationships people establish in numerous ways, and in my view, it is a positive advancement.
Technology has had a strong impact on relationships in three ways. Firstly, the amount of personal time we simply spend with our friends and family has exceedingly shrunken. Since i can carry on conversation through social media whenever i crave, i hardly pay attention to the family members and leave my home to communicate with others. Secondly, having technological based interaction has made people profoundly sad because this type of connection fails to deliver personal touch. When i won second prize in quiz competition, i had presumed to receive a big hug, instead i was sent lots of thumbs up and smiley face in Facebook and Twitter, which actually did not make me feel a personal connection with the poster. Last but not least, misunderstandings, miscommunications and assumptions are the frequent effects of the online interaction. For instance, i have considered many times on what someone meant by their words in a text or over email. Unless i witnessed their body language and heard their voice, i never really knew whether they were being funny, serious or sarcastic during the conversation, leading to utter confusion.
Having said that, i strongly believe that the developments of technology are truly constructive because of the following reasons. Primarily, in the pre-digital age, the intercommunication between me and my father, was entirely restricted to written letters, which were unquestionably time consuming and inefficient. But nowadays i can keep in touch with my parents including all my mates from any part of the globe instantly and efficiently, saving time and money. Another remarkable benefit is that the technology like social media remains a dominant root of finding copious friends with common beliefs, interests and hobbies. Not only would this type of online friendship yield a considerable insight about their respective cultures but also could become a solid basis for overcoming a sense of total isolation. Digital interactions that are usually thought to be a superficial interaction tend to be more genuine currently. In fact, i have found the enjoyers of digital technology being the heaviest users of public places such as cafes, restaurants and religious centres, which means that they can be labelled as similar as face to face interaction.
To sum up, considering effectiveness, knowledge enhancement and authentic relationships of the technology, it has indeed remained a positive development.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. The second paragraph has only negative effects. and there are too many examples.
2. if you agree 'it is a positive advancement.', so in the second paragraph, only need to list those good effects.
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correct pattern:
1. introduction, suppose we support it has good/negative effects.
2. list those effects. generally speaking here. for example: people spend more time on social media, like facebook; people like to use cellphones; ...
don't need examples and don't need to show up our attitudes in this paragraph.
3. the results of those effects. our attitude here. use examples here. we only need to argue one side, don't need to argue both side.
4. conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2205 1500
No. of Different Words: 264 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.225 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.116 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.008 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.467 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... family has exceedingly shrunken. Since i can carry on conversation through socia...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...versation through social media whenever i crave, i hardly pay attention to the fa...
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Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ommunicate with others. Secondly, having technological based interaction has made...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n fails to deliver personal touch. When i won second prize in quiz competition, i...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...i won second prize in quiz competition, i had presumed to receive a big hug, inst...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... presumed to receive a big hug, instead i was sent lots of thumbs up and smiley f...
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Line 3, column 957, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...r words in a text or over email. Unless i witnessed their body language and heard...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...consuming and inefficient. But nowadays i can keep in touch with my parents inclu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, really, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in fact, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 422.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36255924171 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20466507762 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 176.041082164 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625592417062 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3361822425 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.722222222 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230755662014 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648082562281 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634427592901 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153364223493 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910044307464 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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