Task 2 In some cultures children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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Task 2: In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Many countries in the world nowadays educate their children that hard-working people could succeed in any subject. While this message could bring about some specific merits, the drawbacks of this advice outweigh the benefits.

To begin with, there are some noticeable benefits of this advice. Firstly, this conception helps to motivate and encourage their children to keep moving despite encountering hardships in their studies. This might undergird children’s beliefs about success in the future. For example, while my niece does not believe in her ability, after my mother’s advice about trying hard she could have better academic performance. Secondly, since the children could conceptualize the importance of their endless effort, they might be more independent instead of relying on other factors such as the wealth of their families. By contrast, if the children could not embrace this message, they might be lazy and have misconceptions.

However, this message also brings about some clear drawbacks. First and foremost, other factors such as studying method, innate talents or financial condition also play important roles in achieving their targets. For instance, while becoming a singer needs to have a good voice which is inherited since a child was born, trying hard could not help them to change their inherent abilities. Similarly, although a child does not have an ideal height or gorgeous appearance which working hard does not give them these innate elements, a child still wants to be a professional model or beauty queen. As a result, this affects adversely children’s mental health, and they might suffer from mental problems such as self-esteem, depression, or frustration.

In conclusion, although teaching children that attempting to result in success is a great way to motivate them, there are some disadvantages to educating their children that only the hard-working factor is enough for them to pursue their dreams.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46534653465 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76336773591 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587458745875 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9777099836 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.285714286 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3571428571 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254538502759 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937458130788 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445426756616 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163749704373 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211389738608 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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