It's true that our modern living is flooded with various kinds of music and no one can deny the roles of the music industry play in our society. Recently, there has been a heated controversy over traditional music is more crucial than the modern music which become trendy in the past few years. Both of these views will be discussed before my opinion is stated.
It is undeniable that we are in favour of music for some clear reasons. First, it is a tremendous source of entertainment in daily lives. People listen to music to relax after a hard- working day, to be free from the boredom of long journeys and to dance in the evening at the clubs. In addition, music, no matter what sort of it they enjoy, is also the expression of the diversified culture. By immersing yourself in the world of melody and tunes, you are entitled with adequate exposure to the open world. For instance, listening to a US-UK countryside song, you can own the feeling like you're living on beautiful places and getting to know some unique cultural identities of an exotic land on the other world. This results in the notion that people who listen to music on a regular basic have more chances to fully live a meaningful and complete lives.
People who advocate the idea that traditional music is more essential have their own justifications. Primeval music is the symbol of a nation. That explains why they have been played during special occasions of the country such as National Day, Reunification Day or Tet Holiday. To Vietnam, a country that have a thousand years of fighting with many invaders to keep the independency, traditional music is even worthier. It was those kinds of songs that lifted the spirits of millions of soldiers and citizens to keep struggling and heading to the national liberation. Moreover, we have to admit that country music is an effective tool to educate children who is the master of our country in the future about the sacrifice of the previous generations for a fulfilled life like today. That is the root Vietnamese students are obliged to enjoy Vietnamese national anthem every Monday morning. In addition to that, in a fast- paced modern society, it is fruitful for us to wind down by lying down and enjoying some traditional songs to enjoy peace and quiet, keeping ourselves balanced.
On the other hand, it is argued by many people that international music hold a more vital position since it can better fit modern people's preference. For example, fast track music like EDM and rock songs with catchy and dynamic tunes can be better than folk songs at helping us momentarily get away the hustle and bustle of our daily lives. However, it seems to me that those kinds of songs are just to entertain since they have no specific meaning to us. It is more important for the young people to learn traditional music to know about the origin of their ancestors.
In conclusion, it is understandable that people have a difference of opinion about the importance of folk music and international one. But i personally opine that traditional songs should be more valued than their international counterparts based on their vast advantages they offer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 41.998997996 214% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 1615.20841683 163% => OK
No of words: 551.0 315.596192385 175% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78039927405 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6384889565 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 176.041082164 160% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50998185118 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 506.74238477 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4956694843 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9583333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334638961072 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101411976854 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765969726701 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199530325698 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141361525515 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 78.4519038076 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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