There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need
music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the
International music that is heard everywhere nowadays
Music is an important part of humans’ lives, and there are a lot of kinds of music. Some people believe that traditional music is more important than international modern music. However, in my opinion, I am neutral when someone asks me which one is more important, and this essay is going to discuss this problem in further detail.
First of all, there some reasons why people cannot live without music. The first reason is that music is one of the most popular ways of entertainment around the world. When people are sad or happy, they often approach music to relive their pain or become more optimistic. They also encourage themselves and get more positive thoughts. Another reason is that music can eliminate the languages barriers. For example, people listen to songs written or sang by others from a different country can understand and sympathize their messages through the only rhythm. Therefore, it is a wonderful mean to connect human beings together. They can share feelings. Last but not least, people may more concentrate on their work, and get efficient results due to listening to music. Music may stimulate their brain to get not only more productivity, but also imagination. They can create an imaginary world of from weird to great ideas in their mind when listening to songs of a famous composer such as Beethoven.
Next, traditional and international modern music have the same importance in people’s lives. Firstly, traditional music gives them more culture and history of a specific country in the world. For example, Vietnamese traditional music often involves national solidarity, mental encouragement, and pain during wars in the past, so other countries can understand not only Vietnamese history but also how painful Vietnamese had to suffer through rhythm. As a result, oversea friends can sympathize with Vietnamese. Looking at the benefits of international modern music, it is just more than entertainment. It also trains people to become open-minded, and avoid racism of new ideas. People should be willing to listen to a new kind of music and evaluate it whether it is appropriate for them or not because different generations often approach different types of music. In addition, the previous generation can insight into which kinds of music the present one are tending to listen to. As a result, they can propose new strategies to educate the new generation properly.
In brief, music plays an important role in human beings’ lives and no matter which types of music, they are one of the best ways to bring human closer as well as get connected each other. In my opinion, people should not become racists of new kinds of music, but always give others a warm welcome as well as an opportunity to try and perform their own styles.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 157, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... of the best ways to bring human closer as well as get connected each other. In my...
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Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...rm welcome as well as an opportunity to try and perform their own styles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in brief, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 461.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03470715835 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76868966375 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496746203905 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7901407755 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.84 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.44 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.12 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337478442417 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111450292748 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09530809275 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232787192061 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549124389167 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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