There is an increasing trend of old people living longer in many countries around the world.
Do you think this has a positive or a negative effect on the population as a whole?
Due to the advances in medical science, the mortality rate has reduced markedly in the last few decades in certain nations, especially in the European and American continents. This essay opines that this longevity of age is a negative phenomenon which can have a detrimental effect on a nation’s economy and can lead to job scarcity.
The most significant drawback of having older citizens is the amount of public funding needed for their aftercare. Obviously, as a person ages, they become more vulnerable to numerous ailments such as diabetes, cardiovascular diseases and eye-disorders. In order to look after the elderly population, the government has to allocate a major portion of its public funding towards healthcare services which, in order words, means reduced funding for military forces and infrastructure development. For instance, the United Kingdom spends about two-third of its budget on the pensions and day-care of its older population which is inhibiting its development in other aspects. In short, more aged population means unequal distribution of public funding.
In addition, increased lifespan can give rise to job scarcity. This is because as individuals would be living for 70 or 80 years, their retirement age would also get extended. When older population do not cease to work, it would become problematic for the youth to grab job opportunities; apparently companies may prefer to retain employees with years of experience instead of novice. Thus, this scenario can lead to fewer work opportunity for the young generation. To exemplify, in Andorra, a county in the European continent, is facing the problem of job scarcity since the life expectancy of its inhabitants is virtually 95 years which leaves less room for youngsters to get placed in corporate sector due to the availability of more experienced workforce.
To conclude, although breakthrough in medical science has improved the life expectancy drastically, it is going to affect the population of numerous states in terms of reduced chances of employment and a biased budget policy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, if, look, may, so, third, thus, as to, for instance, in addition, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38532110092 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07283607445 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593272171254 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.3904985138 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.461538462 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0793561466473 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.028335382811 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290760051494 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0468774387392 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243373856915 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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