These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is certainly the case in my local area that many
young people choose to leave their home village
or town as soon as they finish college or when
they first get full-time employment.
There are several advantages to this. Firstly,
it gives the individuals better opportunities to
find more suitable jobs. This means they have
much greater flexibility in the careers they can
choose and are no longer forced to take the work
available in the local area. A second benefit is that
they have the chance to meet and work alongside
a wider variety of people, which enriches their
social and professional lives. Another relevant
point is that moving to a place where they are
anonymous allows people greater freedom to
behave as they wish, without worrying about what
those around them think.
However, there are a number of drawbacks to
this development, the most serious being loss
of support. It is important for humans to feel that
they are part of a community and can rely on
family and friends for help, on a day-to-day basis.
In a place where individuals know few people it
is easy to become isolated and lonely. Related to
this point is the fact that when people know very
little about their neighbours, it is hard for mutual
trust to develop. When people have lived in the
same place or village all their lives, their personal
and family backgrounds are widely known and
this information can help others make reliable
judgements, building personal and business
relationships.
On balance, I feel that this trend brings more
negative outcomes than advantages and that it is
leading to real problems of isolation and erosion
of identity
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, second, so, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08896797153 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52231589641 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576512455516 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.691123244 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.166666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 34.0 4.38176352705 776% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287822821317 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097181491565 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389974840706 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576047295535 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580177210923 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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