These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In recent times, most adults follow a trend of shifting to different places after growing up, leaving behind the place where they were born and spend most of their time as children. I am convinced that, disadvantages of this development is far greater than the advantages. This essay intends to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of this situation, and emphasise the reasons why the disadvantages of this development outweigh the advantages by providing reasons and examples to demonstrate the points.
First of all, children who grow in a their native region, will only experience minimal amenities. If those adults choose to live in such suburban region, they have to travel to the nearby city to access all other amenities. Whereas while growing up they will get exposed to other developed regions through news and social media, which has basic infrastructure, as well as good standard of educational institutions. . In addition to this they dream for better job offers - with good career progression, and a handsome income. Thus, people consider moving to other areas in search of better quality life in a sophisticated environment.
Coversely, if all educated adult plans to move to other areas, cities will become over-croweded with abdandaning of their own land. This situation will have a plethora of hideous repercussions on the culture, economy. Moreover, when their native region face a situation where most of its skilled labour migrate to cities, the overall development of that region will be severly damaged beyond reparations. As many people may giveup their roots and won't provide attention to their culture, customs and tradition, resulting in the decline in the originality of the people. If such situation continue to happen, there will be unbalanced growth.
In conclusion, when educated adults move to other places for good lifestyle, the place they were born won't have any notable improvement for a long term.Eventually the place might become abandoned and collapse the basement of a society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30434782609 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93771392155 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590062111801 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2261731689 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228715706003 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710059575787 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055441346912 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143029994644 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637360189451 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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