Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold To what extent do you agree or disagree

Increasing the rate of selling and reaching high sales is one of the vital aims of each company. As a result, all of the factors that can affect customers' desire to buy a product are analyzed precisely. Some experts claim that advertising plays a prominent role in encouraging people to purchase goods, even they do not need them. I completely agree with this viewpoint, and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, advertisement's deniable effect on people's psychological part is one of the main subjects that should be considered. The advertisement about the products is shown continuously, which is recorded on the unconscious part of audiences. For instance, we all have experienced that sometimes we memorize an advertisement song with no intention. I think this mental effect is more than a memorized song and can make artificial demand for products, whether the society needs this or not.
The second point that should be noted is the quality of the advertisement. As we know, there are large companies with skillful experts which merely focus on advertising. These companies produce the most impressive show for the products subtly. For example, they bold the advantages of the goods and indoctrinate that they are the best in the world. Consequently, consumers are induced to buy a product because they think they would never find better goods if they do not buy it.
To sum up, I believe the advertisement has an enormous effect on the sales rate of products. Because not only it can make a fake need in society, but also it can indoctrinate that the goods are the best and persuade people to buy them.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92086330935 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92764213199 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568345323741 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.9481900571 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.2 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5333333333 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191541082512 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056269804994 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448989624938 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109663220596 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246305990207 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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