Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the company has spent a lot of money readily on advertisements to increase their sales record. Some people say
that this enterprise's thinking is superficial to attracting buyers.
I share their concerns and would argue to seller "People are no longer your prey"
However, there may be cases that consumers are attracted by many kinds of eye-catching ways such as television, the internet, billboard. These look pretty gorgeous and good quality. The people always have heard about merits of products so that there are many occasions that they purchase the items impulsively. Moreover, the adolescents who are lack of purchase decision are the good target for the company by employing popular actors and singers. These people gain a more credibility, therefore, students are forced to buy the products. For instance, a person concerns advertising said that the one has an influence on consumers' demand and lead to a surplus.
On the other hand, more and more buyers have become smart and wise, they are no longer deceived by flashy advertisement. They reckon the one as just a noted items and look at thoroughly by suffering the internet or word of mouth. Furthermore, people tend to underestimate the advertisement when encountering anywhere.
After failing to purchase the product where it came from the internet, I suspect the company's credibility at first. The most people consider that corporation is not for being consumer needs but just rising their profit.
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against but I am convinced that the presence of advertisement is not necessarily needed for revenue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...urchase the items impulsively. Moreover, the adolescents who are lack of purchase...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...impulsively. Moreover, the adolescents who are lack of purchase decision are the good ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30798479087 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97572671319 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623574144487 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.277310069 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7142857143 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111972382593 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372299656059 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0248057598656 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0444184233887 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310569213304 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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