Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, high expenditure in purchasing merchandises is a concerning issue, which can rely on the authority of adverts or families requirements. I am utterly convinced that there is no necessity for people from all walks of life to expend a tremendous amount of money, which is not indispensable, practically.
One major contributor due to justifying this issue is appealing commercial adverts. That means, big companies predominantly take advantage of famous celebrities or athletes to absorb people with diverse desires toward their commodities. This trick is practical in most cases and companies can earn huge profits. Take the Clear Shampoo Company as a patiently explicit example. This company employed Cristiano Ronaldo, a football legend, to reach its goals, which was really successful during recent years. Thus, audience absorption is a pivotal factor that is directly proportion with human’s eye and brain.
Another chief inducement is consumerism culture. There are a countless number of goods with different brands, which people are tended to possess, albeit it is not presumably a necessity. Modern generations would rather have the best things to demonstrate their superiority in income, which I think this type of behavior could be due to some psycho diseases. To elucidate more this issue, one of my neighbours is roughly in poverty line, but he always borrows money from people to test cutting-edge technologies such as modern smartphones, smart watches, etc.
To recap, although some people are conscious in spending money in a desire level, and they prefer to utilize their possessions in the best way, I am personally agree that advertising is mainly effective in different age groups , and it is an evitable fact to accept it. It is opt that this trend will change with suitable education to next generations in due course.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...ssions in the best way, I am personally agree that advertising is mainly effective in...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...mainly effective in different age groups , and it is an evitable fact to accept it...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'opted'.
Suggestion: opted
...is an evitable fact to accept it. It is opt that this trend will change with suitab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, thus, i think, such as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29966329966 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99249846616 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659932659933 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5895044293 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0633367278459 0.244688304435 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0190305647193 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250741038736 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0410681231908 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183769343712 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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