Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertisement and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree?

In our era, the huge amount of sales related to consumer products are due to powerful advertisement, not the consumers’ real needs. I partially agree with this notion based on some reasons.

According to the abovementioned fact, current improvements of science and technology has led the populace to more use of resources and despite the environmental issues caused by this this extra usage, these enhancements have been beneficial for human kind in different aspects. For instance purchasing new communication devices has been followed by easier life and has boosted the level of society’s prosperity. Therefore each innovation would have many positive impacts on people’s welfare, however some newly produced goods are giving answers that there were no ask for them before.

Although this is true that technological improvements has boosted people’s standards of living, in most cases newly produced goods are not solving necessary problems and they are only increasing our expectations. One obvious reason of that is the capitalization and power of leading capital investors to change people’s mentality about their needs and persuade them to purchase more stuff in the hope of reaching a higher level of satisfaction. while there is not a limit for this process and the more they purchase, the more the capitalization offers them. and this is done by marketing strategists and professionals via advertisements, Specially by means of media as the main source of dissatisfaction among society.

To sum up, although most new products have made our lives easier, from my personal standpoint, these high sales are not completely based on real needs and capitalization system is using advertisement as a mean to convince people about their new born and infinite needs.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in most cases, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4623655914 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25036450468 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612903225806 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.5669297808 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.4 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125443483121 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486663680293 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467489008927 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867502573229 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494566180032 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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