Today, professionals and businesses benefit both financially and non-financially from the sports industry. This is controversial whether this trend is good or not. From my perspective, while this is beneficial for some, many people might suffer from its disadvantages as well.
On the one hand, big money exchanged in the sports sector is advantageous for some reasons. First and foremost, athletes put great effort into becoming professionals. For instance, they lose the opportunity to pursue their education or the chance to gain other skills and seek a prospective job, investing all their resources into sport. Therefore, when they finally reach the highest level of this hierarchy, they truly deserve to be well-paid. However, high earnings are a trigger, not a target, to attempt to reach this level.
On the other hand, great propaganda in the sports industry is common, resulting in some negative consequences. First of all, powerful mafias will be shaped that benefit speculators more than this chain's precious members. Therefore, most of the money goes to the pockets of invisible parties who rule this game. Furthermore, as not all the talents take advantage of the ways to follow this approach, many of them will lose hope and give up on their goals. Thus, real talents will quit the industry, leading to a weak sports condition. Lastly, as the essence of sport is justice and values such as real strength and morality, such practices will kill this activity's positivity and turn to stiff competition between the wrong individuals.
In conclusion, from my standpoint, the great money which is exchanged by the people involved in the sports industry is not invested in promoting the right parties and will negatively affect the aim behind sports.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...the one hand big money exchanged in the sports sector is advantageous for some reasons...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...aped that benefit speculators more than this chains precious members Therefore most ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...exchanged by the people involved in the sports industry is not invested in promoting t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08802816901 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73254636937 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570422535211 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 284.0 20.2975951904 1399% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1445.0 106.682146367 1354% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 284.0 20.7667163134 1368% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 153.0 7.06120827912 2167% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348459932983 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.348459932983 0.084324248473 413% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203596364075 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254555489553 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 144.5 13.0946893788 1104% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -216.78 50.2224549098 -432% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 114.1 11.3001002004 1010% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.72 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.61 8.58950901804 252% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 62.0 9.78957915832 633% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 115.6 10.1190380762 1142% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 62.0 10.7795591182 575% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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