Nowadays, sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways. Is this a positive or negative development for sports?
It is widely acknowledged that sports people and the companies in this market have high revenues affecting to their financial position and others. I agree to the certain extent that this have a good impact on sports development, however there are some definite issues to consider which will be further discussed in this essay.
High earnings of sports professional give a rise to various positive impacts. First, the strong financial position of sport firms ensure their ability to offer higher quality and standard of products as well as services provided to their customers. Since at the present day it is important to have quality improvement among high competition in the market, the strong financial status sport firms can invest in some researchs accompanied by product development programs for innovative products. What is more, sports celebrities and sports firms should have a well paid-off. This is because this occupations require more investment in time and money. For instant, some sporters need to leave their school for hard training for being a sport professional. Also, the equipments used in training and their competition cost expensively. So, the higher standard of sport is partly caused by the motivation from high earning.
On the other hand, the higher revenues in sports area could contribute to some drawbacks. First, there will be a higher competition among companies and players in sport market. The higher incomes being as an inspiration of many people could lead to appeal some new coming players with low quality. Seeing that there is no barriers to entry in this market, people may be take part in without strong intention to be sport professionals resulting in inadequated level of training. Another point is that some sport players and their company might have less passion in more practice and performance development due to having enough earning. Accordingly, there is a lack of improvement in sport professional area.
In conclusion, there are many benefits and drawbacks of sport people and companies’ high earning. However, in my opinion, I believe that the benefits outweigh negative effects because it is a good motivation for people becoming a sport celebrities to continue in the improvement in this area.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, may, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27423822715 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84550778277 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501385041551 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.462827047 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.777777778 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430420832842 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149655028202 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723876064853 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273450963538 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436088779115 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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