Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports Why is it Is it a positive or negative development

It is irrefutable that children are mostly inclined toward playing indoor game instead of playing outdoor sports. I believe that this is totally a negative trend despite some benefits.
To begin with, there is no room for doubt that video games improve the mental ability of teenagers. To be more specific, video games are mentally demanded, while playing it children have to use their mental effort to conclude so their problem solving skills are improved. For instance,there is a variety of games are available such as quizz, puzzle etc. Hence their mental growth is enhance.
Nevertheless, there are some obvious disadvantage firstly it has a detrimental effect on their health. Secondly, it create a hindrances in developing social skills of juveniles.outdoor sports help for children to maintain their health and also their social skills. For instance my professor told me that being smart is not enough person need to have good skills to be prosperous.
In conclusion, i opine that children should not play only video games but also taken participate outdoor sports thus it improve to remain fit and healthy.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 41.998997996 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 1615.20841683 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 181.0 315.596192385 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17679558011 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7834010689 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.640883977901 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 506.74238477 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2959054992 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8 7.06120827912 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144498593375 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551423826462 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499975890407 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989162522958 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393591170454 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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