Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
consumerism among the young adaults is one of the most dreadful threats that actually irritates us. it is believed that the school bears the responsibility to assist the students in terms of cash utilization in these sophisticated era. In my opinion, i think that this occurence turn to be our imperative in the future because of the loyal life of the millennial generation. In the light of the topic, i will interpret two of my personal stereotypes about this occurence.
To begin with, there are myriads of affluent families who do not include financial instruction as their children's main skill. The prevailing parents are too affectionate to their generations in terms of wealth. They do not concern about the children's behavior towards the granted money and always pamper the children with luxury goods. this deeds are not a good way to love the next generations because it create the sense of consumerism among the teenagers. Therefore schools should support the parents in terms of incomplete tutoring system of the parents.
To end with, the abundance of students' time is spent in their school. this means the education center should create a good financial turotial for the learners. To illustrate, when a student just brings a large sum of money to the school, the authorities should supervised the utilization of the cash and admonish them if needed. Thus, the development of students' mindset through money is originated from school.
to conclude, today's social life forms the egocentric character of the teenagers in terms of money utilization. From my point of view, i espouse the idea that school should be resilient enough to shape the financial mindset of the students and also the future implementation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, so, therefore, thus, i think, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11307420495 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88200617972 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554770318021 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2035458764 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.4666666667 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240915930468 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731927639906 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453410563965 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136421899313 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496314135239 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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