Topic: Nowadays many big cities have become overcrowded. Why is it happening and what is are the possible measures to prevent it?
Population explosion is one of the major concerns of present era. Presently, it has been noticed that massive number of people prefers to move to metropolis in search and hope for a better lifestyle. This in turn is resulting in ever increasing population in the urban sectors and towns. Here, I would like to account for the reasons and the remedial measures to tackle this issue.
There are manifold causes for this happening. To begin with, cities uphold numerous opportunities in terms of education and employment. For instance, it is obvious that prestigious universities and colleges available in the cities can give high quality education in almost each and every field people desire to opt for their academics. Moreover, once the students are over with their studies and have their degrees in hand, they generally decide to stay back to make a living as there are tremendous job openings in both public and private sectors in the metros. Hence people are moving to bigger towns to pursue their objectives and ambitions.
Further emphasizing, along with the opportunities, masses also seek better amenities such as advanced healthcare, flawless transportation and sources of amusement that are laid by the metropolitan administration to provide a hassle free and a worthy life to its dwellers. As a result, enormous population tends to shift from their rural background to the urban sectors to relish a better lifestyle.
Now, there are numerous measures to overcome this concern. Initially, smaller towns or even villages should get all the required and necessary support from the authorities to provide quality education and optimum jobs to the folks of such regions so that they can live with prosperity and contentment. Consequently, they will not be allured to the limelight of the city life which will automatically lower the figures of rural migrants to the mega cities.
To recapitulate, it can be stated that people shift to urban areas due to certain developmental factors. Therefore, concerned authorities should look for appropriate alternatives to address the problem of overcrowding in the metropolitan cities.
Comments
Hello there
Hello there
Can this essay be please reviewed again as i do not think it deserves just 1 band. I shall be grateful.
Regards
Rosy
Essay evaluation report
It is a good one. why the e-grader always gives you low marks because the essay content didn't match the essay topic exactly, for example, in this essay, the e-grader is looking for the key words, like: 'big cities' , 'overcrowded', 'happening'...but they are not available in the content.
though you put like 'bigger towns', it is completely different to 'big cities'. so be careful to read the topic.
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another suggestion is related to the writing pattern you used. You'd better change the writing pattern since a lot of other users use this pattern too. potentially it may remove you marks down.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1756 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.15 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.875 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.722 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.278 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.012 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thank you for review...I
Thank you for review...I appreciate it.
Regards
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 564, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...blic and private sectors in the metros. Hence people are moving to bigger towns to pu...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...rsue their objectives and ambitions. Further emphasizing, along with the opportuniti...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29325513196 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97116224034 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8963750886 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8125 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0426536860822 0.244688304435 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0146590218294 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0202086345856 0.0667982634062 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0202931528163 0.151304729494 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182373073327 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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