Major companies use sporting events to promote their products. Some people think it has a negative effect on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Sports play a magnificent role to uplift the standard of health, wealth and relationships. Presently, it is quite common to see sporting events being sponsored by companies and the participating teams and even individual players wearing logos on their uniforms to advertise the company products. However, it is claimed that this trend has adverse consequences on the sports. Here, I would like to accord with given statement.
To begin with, commercialization has changed the attitude of the players and jeopardized the true spirit of the game. To illustrate, companies offer lucrative packages to players that not only make the players acquisitive but also allure them to indulge more in earning rather than performing in their respective events. Hence, the materialistic attitudes of the sportsmen might hamper and defame the spirit of the game as they will consider it just as a business. Furthermore, consumers probably get tempted by inferior products in lieu of meeting and supporting their favourite celebrity players, who have endorsed those products or services.
Further emphasizing on my point of view, television viewers get to see a lot of advertisements of the sponsors during breaks in between their favorite programs. Therefore, this deviates their concentration thereby reducing the entertainment value of the programs they are watching. As a consequence, viewers may lose their interest in the sporting events due to excessive adverts being telecasted and interrupting their shows.
On the contrary, critics assert that advertising helps in increasing awareness about a company’s products as services. To elaborate, people easily get to know about new offerings by the corporate houses which are worthwhile to help masses decide about the products they want to buy. Thus, advertising plays paramount role to acquaint people with appropriate knowledge and information. What is more, promotion through well recognized brand ambassador helps in elevating sales and profits of a company.
To recapitulate, it can be stated that sponsorship is required for a sport to rise and reach out to common people but too much commercialization and advertisement have overshadowed the true meaning of sports and its spirit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, on the contrary, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52906976744 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18235229726 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8127920552 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.875 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16435763982 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461733670476 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427908346927 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086367182157 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375538717013 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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