Topic : some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Dicuss both views and give your opinion
In contemporary world, some people believe that we are more rely on each others while others think we are more self-sufficient and break out of dependence on anyone else. In my view, people have become independent day by day.
On the one hand, some people claim that people are more self-reliant now for several reasons. Firstly, families are becoming smaller so people have freedom to live far away from hometown. To be more specific, our ancestors used to live in a large house with full of members but in the modern life, almost youngster interested in living and studying far away from their family. Also, they have an oppoturnity to chase their dream, do careers which they kind on without criticism of parents. In addition, the number of students who tend to study aboard are increasing. For example, studying in another country is a good chance for students to challenge themselves that aim for independent life and adapt them to new surroundings, they will no more depend on family in hometown. Sencondly, the development of technology also plays an important part. Having lived in 4.0 life, people can do everything through electronic devices access to internet. To be more details, people work online from any part of the world. For example, during covid-19 pandemic, all universities, schools encourage studying at home with some supported apps to maintain knowledges. Specially for officers who do not have to much time, they can control their workload in house. Working online and online education help people to become self-contained, they do not need to rely on others in accommodation or fees.
On the other hand, some people believe that we are more depend on each other. Firstly, because of subsistence expenses . For instance, a group people can share to rent a house if they do not have enough money to pay for it. Secondly, some activities need people to contact with others such as working a project, they need help from everyone else.
In conclusion, in modern world, people are less depend on others but I believe they have experiments for themselves in independent life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed to live in a large house with full of members but in the modern life, almost y...
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Line 2, column 1194, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... Specially for officers who do not have to much time, they can control their workl...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...Firstly, because of subsistence expenses . For instance, a group people can share ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98290598291 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73963668783 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547008547009 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.734340292 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0526315789 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05263157895 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384122988546 0.244688304435 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127623270231 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1365705601 0.0667982634062 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318114192175 0.151304729494 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132468263 0.056905535591 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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