Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of the society. Do you think art and music still have a place in today's modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?
In all societies, art and music are believed to be some vital factors. From my perspective, in the enhancement world of technology, art and music still play an important role, and spending more time studying these subjects at school brings many advantages for children.
To begin with, there are two main reasons why art and music still have a place in modern society. Firstly, music and art are some of the most efficient ways to reenact the past. For instance, pieces of evidence of the Vietnam War are recorded in the song's lyrics and passed down to younger generations to let them understand events that their ancestors faced. Secondly, an increasing number of people have to deal with hectic schedules every day so music and art are types of relaxation. Consequently, enjoying paintings in galleries or going to concerts on weekends are ideal ways to relieve the pressure of workload and homework after long weekdays.
In my opinion, schoolchildren should spend their time on optional subjects such as art and music. It is obvious that studying these helps students to develop their hidden skills. To be exemplified, a lot of celebrities discovered and trained artistic skills when they were very young and became successful in their career path. Furthermore, if students concentrate on artistic subjects, they will learn compulsory subjects more efficiently due to the ability to remember and expose emotions. Therefore, children have an opportunity for comprehensive development.
To wrap up, I believe that music and art are an essential part of our society despite modernization and learning these in schools is beneficial for children.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22180451128 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89716966415 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639097744361 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5599294722 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.846153846 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6153846154 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408157383816 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141308432974 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120685492461 0.0667982634062 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256527044547 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787980661352 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.